Copy this 'list' writing and revise it so that it is a)interesting and b) layered.
My Summer Vacation
Over the summer I had a great time. My family went to Creston, B.C. for two weeks. The first day we got there I went swimming with my cousins in a secret lake. It was warm. Then we ate lunch on rocks by the lake and then walked home in our barefeet. The next day we went to a market and I bought everyone cinnamen buns and saw a lot of big dogs. Later that day we went out for dinner to a Chinese restaurant. My favourite day was when we went for a walk through the forest and saw deer, squirrels, and a wild rabbit. We collected mushrooms with our Grandpa. That night my dad made pizza on the BBQ and after dinner we played boardgames. I read three books there and finished my story about a runaway prince I started in school. My cousins read it and said it was good. The last day there I helped my Aunt with her quilt and I pricked my finger six times. When I got home I wished I could go back.
My Summer Vacation
Over the summer I had a great time. My family went to Creston, B.C. for two weeks. The first day we got there I went swimming with my cousins in a secret lake. It was warm. Then we ate lunch on rocks by the lake and then walked home in our barefeet. The next day we went to a market and I bought everyone cinnamen buns and saw a lot of big dogs. Later that day we went out for dinner to a Chinese restaurant. My favourite day was when we went for a walk through the forest and saw deer, squirrels, and a wild rabbit. We collected mushrooms with our Grandpa. That night my dad made pizza on the BBQ and after dinner we played boardgames. I read three books there and finished my story about a runaway prince I started in school. My cousins read it and said it was good. The last day there I helped my Aunt with her quilt and I pricked my finger six times. When I got home I wished I could go back.